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Sabtu, 25 April 2015
Mr. Irwan Hidayat
Mr. Irwan Hidayat is
one of the next generation of traditional medicine “PT. SIDOMUNCUL” which
firstly built by his grandma, Mrs. Rakhmat Sulistyo. The product of Sidomuncul
are Tolak Angin, Kuku Bima, etc. I knew Mr. Irwan Hidayat by his
advertisement’s product on TV. He was also appear every time at Ramadhan by his
event is free trip event. Mr. Irwan Hidayat continued his grandma’s business.
Grandmother started
the company in 1940 in a modest Yogyakarta drugstore, selling traditional Japanese
herbal remedies. After the clan bought a small factory, Mr. Irwan Hidayat
modernized it after starting at the family business in 1972. Grandma’s business
was almost collapse, but Mr. Irwan Hidayat never gave up to attend his business
again by new stategy. And then, he earns high omzet and can continuing his
business until now. I very amazed knowing Mr. Irwan Hidayat because he always
give five billions every year for social care, such as free trip and let old
employee to stay work in his company.
Hello my friend Kurnia ...
BalasHapusI want to give feedback for you,
1. in your post, you wrote "The product of Sidomuncul are Tolak Angin, Kuku Bima, etc."
that's in correct sentence, that should be "The products of Sidomuncul are Tolak Angin, Kuku Bima, etc."
# so that should use "s" at the word "products" because that's plural.
2. "he earns high omzet and can continuing his business until now."
that's in correct sentence, that should be "he earns high omzet and he can continue his business until now."
# modal "can" should be followed by infinitive verb.
Hai, Kurnia
BalasHapusDid you mean "new stategy" is "new strategy? :)
And I hope you will give some feedback in my work too ;)
BalasHapusHello Kurnia, let me give feedback too.
BalasHapus1. I very amazed knowing Mr. Irwan Hidayat. (You have forgotten to use "to be" because amazed is an adjective. I think the correct sentence is "I am very amazed to know Mr. Irwan Hidayat).
2. he always give(s) five billions every year for social care. (In the present tense if the subject are He, She, or It the verb must following by s or es).
Thank you Kurnia.
Hi Kurnia.. Let me give my feedback to you..
BalasHapusMr. Irwan Hidayat continued( you should use "has continued" because it is happen from past until now) his grandma’s business.
Thank you.
@Septiana, Asri, and Lintang : Okay, thanks for your feedback :)
BalasHapus@anggi : Okay Anggi, typo "new strategy" :D thanks for your feedback :)