Writing Project C

I'm so sorry miss, I don't know what happen with my work yesterday. I sent my #RevisedWork4 at about 2 p.m. I'm sure that it was already sent. The latest time I checked my post at about 1.30 p.m yesterday. In that time I have already found my #work 4 #Revised work 4 #revised work 2, but now I just can find the #revised work 2. So, I really sorry miss about it. And it is my #Revised work 4 again. In this correction I want to give a picture of Tirto Utomo and add more revision.

TIRTO UTOMO

Do you know aqua? It is a brand of bottled water from Indonesia. The founder of Aqua is Sien Biauw Kwa or Tirto Utomo. He is one of the successful businessman from Indonesia. He was born on March 8th, 1930 in Wonosobo. He has studied in Magelang for Junior High School. He reached the school by bicycle everyday. Then, he went to HBS School (Senior High School at the time of the Dutch East Indies). He had studied in Semarang for 2 years, before he moved to Malang. At this time, he met Kwee Gwat Kien or Lisa.

Tirto Utomo has studied for 2 years at Gajah (Gadjah) Mada University in Surabaya. He has worked as a journalist at “Jawa Pos Newspaper” during his study. Tirto eventually moved to the Faculty of Law in University of Indonesia. He was working as a Chief Editor of the Daily Sin Po and Five Colors Magazine when he studied at university. He also met Lisa in University of Indonesia. Lisa was also working at British American Tobacco (BAT Indonesia) when she studied. She dropped out from university, after she had failed on her final exam. In 1955, Lisa taught elementary students at Regina Pecis.

Tirto Utomo and Lisa got married on December, 21th 1957 in Malang. The big problem came in 1959, Tirto dismissed from Sin Po as an editor. However, he had the willingness to finish his study from University of Indonesia. October 1960, Tirto graduated and hold a law of degree. After graduation, Tirto worked in Permina (Perusahaan Minyak Nasional). He was placed in “Pangkalan Brandan”. There, the daily need was using (without a)water from a river.

Tirto Utomo got an idea to build Aqua when (while) he was entertaining delegates from U.S. company. The dinner was interrupted when the delegation’s wife had diarrhea caused by consuming water. Tirto realized that the guests from Western countries are not used to drinking (drink) boiled water, but water that has been sterilized. Tirto Utomo sure that Indonesian’s people will lack clean water ready to drink.

Tirto and his brother have begun to learn how to process packaged drinking water since this incident. Tirto’s brother worked in Polaris (A bottled water company in Thailand) to learn how made a bottled water. So, In 1973 PT Aqua Golden Mississippi is built. Tirto Utomo already died in 1994. Tirto Utomo already make a manufacturer of bottled water which is the largest in Indonesia.

Hello guys, we can found incorrect word or grammatical error in this assignment, so we don't change anything. Thank you.

1. Present Tense

    I drink a glass of milk every morning.

2. Present Continuous Tense

    She is reading a novel in the library.

3. Past Tense

    My brother arrived from Jakarta at 10.00 a.m. and I met him at 11.00 a.m.

4. Past Continuous Tense

    Riana was sleeping when her mother knocked the door.

5. Past Perfect Tense

    I had visited my brother once in 2008 before he moved to Kalimantan last year.

Hello guys, I want to tell you about the founder of AQUA. I want to give a picture of him for my revision.

TIRTO UTOMO

Do you know aqua? It is a brand of bottled water from Indonesia. The founder of Aqua is Sien Biauw Kwa or Tirto Utomo. He is one of the successful businessman from Indonesia. He was born on March 8th, 1930 in Wonosobo. He has studied in Magelang for Junior High School. He reached the school by bicycle everyday. Then, he went to HBS School (Senior High School at the time of the Dutch East Indies). He had studied in Semarang for 2 years, before he moved to Malang. At this time, he met Kwee Gwat Kien or Lisa.

Tirto Utomo has studied for 2 years at Gajah Mada University in Surabaya. He has worked as a journalist at “Jawa Pos Newspaper” during his study. Tirto eventually moved to the Faculty of Law in University of Indonesia. He was working as a Chief Editor of the Daily Sin Po and Five Colors Magazine when he studied at university. He also met Lisa in University of Indonesia. Lisa was also working at British American Tobacco (BAT Indonesia) when she studied. She dropped out from university, after she had failed on her final exam. In 1955, Lisa taught elementary students at Regina Pecis.

Tirto Utomo and Lisa got married on December, 21th 1957 in Malang. The big problem came in 1959, Tirto dismissed from Sin Po as an editor. However, he had the willingness to finish his study from University of Indonesia. October 1960, Tirto graduated and hold a law of degree. After graduation, Tirto worked in Permina (Perusahaan Minyak Nasional). He was placed in “Pangkalan Brandan”. There, the daily need was using water from a river.

Tirto Utomo got an idea to build Aqua when (while) he was entertaining delegates from U.S. company. The dinner was interrupted when the delegation’s wife had diarrhea caused by consuming water. Tirto realized that the guests from Western countries are not used to drinking boiled water, but water that has been sterilized. Tirto Utomo sure that Indonesian’s people will lack clean water ready to drink.

Tirto and his brother have begun to learn how to process packaged drinking water since this incident. Tirto’s brother worked in Polaris (A bottled water company in Thailand) to learn how made a bottled water. So, In 1973 PT Aqua Golden Mississippi is built. Tirto Utomo already died in 1994. Tirto Utomo already make a manufacturer of bottled water which is the largest in Indonesia.

TIRTO UTOMO

            Do you know aqua? It is a brand of bottled water from Indonesia. The founder of Aqua is Sien Biauw Kwa or Tirto Utomo. He is one of the successful businessman from Indonesia. He was born on March 8th, 1930 in Wonosobo. He has studied in Magelang for Junior High School. He reached the school by bicycle everyday. Then, he went to HBS School (Senior High School at the time of the Dutch East Indies). He had studied in Semarang for 2 years, before he moved to Malang. At this time, he met Kwee Gwat Kien or Lisa.

            Tirto Utomo has studied for 2 years at Gajah Mada University in Surabaya. He has worked as a journalist at “Jawa Pos Newspaper” during his study. Tirto eventually moved to the Faculty of Law in University of Indonesia. He was working as a Chief Editor of the Daily Sin Po and Five Colors Magazine when he studied at university. He also met Lisa in University of Indonesia. Lisa was also working at British American Tobacco (BAT Indonesia) when she studied. She dropped out from university, after she had failed on her final exam. In 1955, Lisa taught elementary students at Regina Pecis.

            Tirto Utomo and Lisa got married on December, 21th 1957 in Malang. The big problem came in 1959, Tirto dismissed from Sin Po as an editor. However, he had the willingness to finish his study from University of Indonesia. October 1960, Tirto graduated and hold a law of degree. After graduation, Tirto worked in Permina (Perusahaan Minyak Nasional). He was placed in “Pangkalan Brandan”. There, the daily need was using a water from river.

            Tirto Utomo got an idea to build Aqua when he was entertaining delegates from U.S. company.  The dinner was interrupted when the delegation’s wife had diarrhea caused by consuming water. Tirto realized that the guests from Western countries are not used to drinking boiled water, but water that has been sterilized. Tirto Utomo sure that Indonesian’s people will lack clean water ready to drink.

            Tirto and his brother have begun to learn how to process packaged drinking water since this incident. Tirto’s brother worked in Polaris (A bottled water company in Thailand) to learn how made a bottled water. So, In 1973 PT Aqua Golden Mississippi is built. Tirto Utomo already died in 1994. Tirto Utomo already make a manufacturer of bottled water which is the largest in Indonesia.

Good evening guys. I want to give some feedback for our task last week, but before that I want to say sorry because my post is too late. 

Actually, the sentences are very good but I want to give some of my view about it.

Group 13

1.  Present Continuous Tense : I think the restaurants must be write without “s”, because we know that it is one restaurant .

2.  Past Continuous Tense : The word come must be replaced with verb 2 “came’, because it shows the interrupted action in the past.

 3.Present Perfect Continuous Tense   : This is Past perfect continuous tense, right?

Group 14

    1. Present Tense : Come at replaced with come to

Group 9

1.  Past Perfect and Past Tense : Fauzy had sent me a(n)  email before he called (me) yesterday.

Group 10

1. Past Continuous : I was recording supplies inventory while  my partner moved (was moving)  this car to the parking area. Because it is parallel actions.

2. Past Continuous : He was washing his car while his assistant cleaned  (was cleaning) his garden. Because it is parallel action.

3. Past Continuous :  Vitta was making some cakes while (when) her mother went to the market.

4. Past Perfect :

I had finished wrap up this candy two hours ago, so you can bring it to the warehouse. I think the sentences will be better if it is written like this, “ I had finished wrap up this candy two hours ago, before you brought  it to the warehouse.

Group 8

1. Present Continuous Tense :

He is typing letters  (by himself) because his secretary is on leave.

Group 6

1. Past Continuous Tense 

I was sleeping when  (while) my mother was cooking yesterday. Because it is parallel action. 

Group 4

1. Present Tense

I always washes (wash)  my face and brushes my teeth before going to bed. Washes must be replaced with “wash”, because “I” is followed by am or verb, and then (she, he, it ) is followed by is or verb+s/es. 

Group 3

1. Presnt Tense

1.       Indonesia Health Card from the President's program  provides free health insurance for the poor Indonesian.

This sentence is very complicated for me. Actually, we can write the sentence like that “ Kartu Indonesia Sehat provides free health insurance for poor people in Indonesia.

Group 1

1. Past Continuous Tense

Lina was studying English when (while)  her parents were cleaning the house. Because it is parallel action.