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Jumat, 24 April 2015
DIAN
PELANGI
Dian wahyu Utami is often called Dian
Pelangi.She is the main designer of Dian Pelangi company, one of
the nation’s leading moslem fashion house. She was Born on January 14th 1991 in
Palembang, she later graduated from Ecole Superieur des Arts et Techniques de
la Mode (ESMOD) with a very satisfying grade at 2008. She grew up in
a family that strong in Islamic tradition. her father is a garment businessman,
and her mother is the owner of Muslim boutique , she was challenged to make a
change.
When
Dian was born, her parents started doing bussiness veil of Palembang rainbow
cloth. The Muslim fashion boutique was
named Dian Pelangi who was become a brand name at once dian nickname . since dian was child,
she had been prepared by her parents to continue the family business. There was
a time when Dian felt life was too organized. she had rebelled when she
was forced to take the Department of dressmaking at SMK
I Pekalongan, Central Java.
Then
she took over the management batik business of her parents . Three years
managed by Dian, her parents’ boutique has grown to nine cities, including an
outlet in Malaysia. As young designer , Dian Pelangi brings
colour and excitement to the local and International Muslim Fashion Scene.She
is fanatic with her hand made traditional cloth as the raw material. such as
jumputan cloth, songket Palembang and
batik pekalongan.
Dian Pelangi was 18
years old when she made her debut at the the Jakarta Fashion Week in November
2009 .With her unique designs to incorporate bright colors into her fashions
along with her unique ways of styling her hijabs on her models, she has
captured the attention of the Muslim Fashion world. In 2012, Dian rainbow publishes his own books
under the title Hijab Street Style, published by Scholastic Press Hijab books Street Style is the first book Dian
Pelangi which was launched on July 15, 2012. The book contains about 600 more
photos from various Indonesian Muslim and also from abroad such as Kuala
Lumpur, Singapore, Bangkok and others.
Dian
Pelangi known as a multitalented designer, he brings a fresh breeze on the
stage colorful Muslim fashion in Indonesia and overseas. Dian Pelangi works
inspired by the rainbow which has so rich in color and always tried to explore
the Indonesian culture ranging from the beautiful to the batik songket fancy.
Dian Pelangi is a designer who can demonstrate to the world that the Muslim
fashion could be a global fashion icon.
At the end of 2011, Dian Pelangi
travelled to Paris to join The International Fair of Muslim World at Le Bourget
and has certainly made her mark as a young Indonesian designer to watch.
Hello Isti, let me give some feedback for your work.
BalasHapus1. her (Her) father is a garment businessman. You must use a capital letter for the first line.
2. You must write the name of someone with Capital (Dian).
3. There was a time when Dian felt (her) life was too organized.
4. she (She) had rebelled when.
5. Dian rainbow (Pelangi) publishes his (her) own books (book) under the title Hijab Street Style, published by Scholastic Press Hijab.
6. books Street Style is the first book Dian Pelangi which was launched on July 15, 2012. I think this sentence must be reduced. You just need to use "July 15, 2012" and then you can combine it with the sentence before. I think it is more simple.
7. Indonesian Muslim and also from abroad such as Kuala Lumpur, Singapore, Bangkok and (,) others. You must insert the comma (,) before and.
8. Dian Pelangi (is) known as a multitalented designer. I think you can insert "is" before known, because it is passive voice.
9. he (she) brings a fresh breeze on the stage colorful Muslim. Dian Pelangi is woman right? So you must use "she".
Thank you so much, and I'm sorry if my statement is not true. I also ask you to give some feedback for my assignment.
It would be better if you were more careful about the letters after the "." is supposed capital letters .
BalasHapusAnd after point add space.
"As young designer , Dian Pelangi bring.." (You should not add space before “,”)
"As young designer, Dian Pelangi bring.."
And the last
"Dian Pelangi known as a multitalented designer, he brings a fresh breeze on the stage colorful Muslim fashion in Indonesia and overseas."
You should write "Dian Pelangi known as a multitalented designer, she brings a fresh breeze on the stage colorful Moslem fashion in Indonesia and overseas." Dian Pelangi is woman so you should replace "he" with "she" are you typo? and in english you should moslem.
Give me your feedback too. Thank you :)
And maybe the sentence ".She is fanatic with her hand made traditional cloth as the raw material. such as jumputan cloth, songket Palembang and batik pekalongan." if would be better if you write ". She is fanatic with her hand made traditional cloth as the raw material. ¬Such as jumputan cloth, songket Palembang and batik Pekalongan."
BalasHapusthanks to sania and asri who have read and give comment to my assignmnet. nice Asri :) you said that I must give comma before and , but you write it after and. I think we should give "on" because it is specific time there are date, month, and year.
BalasHapus