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Jumat, 24 April 2015

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Bill Gates


Bill Gates was born on October 28th, 1955 in Seattle in a family having rich business, political and community service background. Bill was the second of three children in an upper-middle class family. Bill Gates as a child was very competitive, curious, and depth thinker. His parents decided to enroll him in the private preparation school, Lakeside School.Bill Gates is one of  richest men in the world. Bill Gates was the founder and first chairmen of Microsoft, a global software developer and Internet technology provider. 

I knew him because everyone talking about him. And I have read a book about him. And I'm sure that everyone know him because Bill Gates is the one of success businessman in the world. He had an early interest in software and began programming computers at the age of thirteen. In 1973, Bill Gates became a student at Harvard University. Within a year, Bill Gates dropped out from Harvard. Then he formed Microsoft. Now, Microsoft become the greatest software and technology developer factory in the world.

I prefer Bill Gates than other businessman because he is a hard worker, never give up, and always focus in his skills. And with his skills he can get much money, and he become famous people in this world. I hope I can be a success businessman like him and collect much money.

7 komentar:

  1. Hello my friend ,I give you comment/feedback about your work.

    I think, you should add ","
    I prefer Bill Gates than other businessman because, he is a hard worker.

    I think, you should use simple past tense.
    and he became famous people in this world.


    I'm sorry, if my feedback not true.

    BalasHapus
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    1. Thanks for your correction, Ulfi :)
      But I think no comma "," in my sentence, "I prefer Bill Gates than other businessman because he is a hard worker."
      Thanks for comment :)

      Hapus
    2. Thanks for your correction, Ulfi :)
      But I think no comma "," in my sentence, "I prefer Bill Gates than other businessman because he is a hard worker."
      Thanks for comment :)

      Hapus
  2. hai sugeng :D

    i'd like to feedback on your post
    statemn. "I hope I can be a 'success businessman' like him and collect much money".
    i think that's inccorrect, bcos 'succes businessman' is adverb. n you mean is adjective. i feel you should to use 'a successfull businessman'
    i think so, how you?

    BalasHapus
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    1. I think so too, thanks for remember me about that, Rohmah :)

      Hapus
    2. I think so too, thanks for remember me about that, Rohmah :)

      Hapus
  3. Sugeng, may I remind you to re-read your assignment? you wrote "c an" that word should be "can" without space.. "muc h" should be "much"

    BalasHapus